During the last few weeks that I listened to my peer's paper read aloud, I found that many of the papers had the same things to work on. For example,I found that some of the papers had plot summary in them before or after their quote. Then there were people who had a little bit of problem with one or two mistakes on conventions. Other than that, I don't seem to find anything that my peers needed to work on. Although I thought that there could be a better hook in the topic sentences. On the other hand few people had to work on their concrete details and commentary. There were some commentaries that were kind of plot summaries and not their own thought about the concrete details. Also, the commentaries didn't really tie in with the concrete details.
On my own five part paragraph essay, I found that I had many things to work on. What hit me the worst was how my paper didn't flow easily. I could polish how I worded my sentences and how my sentences were structured. Also, I can go back and choose better transitions for each point that I was making. My commentaries seemed to waver from what my concrete detail was trying to prove. Maybe I can find better concrete details to support my idea so that I could write more about the topic and I can go deeper on what I was discussing about in my essay.
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