Monday, November 22, 2010

Something Interesting

In our discussion "Lobsters" by Howard Nemerov, I heard some interesting ideas and insights that I didn't notice about the poem. For example, when someone mentioned " As he crawls over the shell of a dream resembling himself." At first, I didn't pay much attention to what the poem meant and what that line meant. But, when someone mentioned that part, I started to think what did that line meant. The first thought was that the lobster was just crawling over a rock or something. As we started discussing about that line, we go our heads together and figured out that it means that the lobster is walking over another lobster that is like himself. So it's like a bunch of lobsters just crawling over each other. 

I admit, I'm not much of a person to look deep into a poem. After we had our discussion, I felt that the poem "Lobsters" was the poet's way of explaining how beautiful the lobster is in a somber tone. But, the poet also compares humans to lobsters as if humans weren't as beautiful. Although the poet was describing the lobsters as if they are at a much higher beauty scale than us humans, they are somewhat similar to humans. Like humans they are waiting wonder when their time will come to an end. Usually we humans don't think about these things. But, when in the last two lines " Thinking: There's something underneath the world. The fame beneath the pot that boils the water". It sparks our thoughts about when will our time end? Is there more than what we see and experience right?

Saturday, November 6, 2010

5 part paragraph

During the last few weeks that I listened to my peer's paper read aloud, I found that many of the papers had the same things to work on. For example,I found that some of the papers had plot summary in them before or after their quote. Then there were people who had a little bit of problem with one or two mistakes on conventions. Other than that, I don't seem to find anything that my peers needed to work on. Although I thought that there could be a better hook in the topic sentences. On the other hand few people had to work on their concrete details and commentary. There were some commentaries that were kind of plot summaries and not their own thought about the concrete details. Also, the commentaries didn't really tie in with the concrete details.


On my own five part paragraph essay, I found that I had many things to work on. What hit me the worst was how my paper didn't flow easily. I could polish how I worded my sentences and how my sentences were structured. Also,  I can go back and choose better transitions for each point that I was making. My commentaries seemed to waver from what my concrete detail was trying to prove. Maybe I can find better concrete details to support my idea so that I could write more about the topic and I can go deeper on what I was discussing about in my essay.